Saturday 21 April 2018

…Although they ran quickly, they were still not making enough progress…by Grace B

Great, today is sports day! Chloe, who is very slow at running, loathed this day. Chloe’s least favourite race was the 4 by 100 metre relay and her sports teacher, Miss Fieldman, has selected her to take part in that race. The race has finally arrived, Chloe was first up in her team, as she ran like a snail to her teammate in front of her, she passed the metallic blue baton and as her teammate ran although they ran quickly, they were still not making enough progress. Chloe was very disappointed as her teammates were slow at running.

2 comments:

  1. Well done Grace, your writing style is great. I love the simile of the snail and the metallic blue baton. Your verb choices are great too- loathed, selected...
    You captured the idea of the prompt very well by using the tale of a race, maybe next time Chloe will have to make sure she gets on a faster team!
    Keep up the good work!
    Ciara (Team 100)
    Wicklow, Ireland

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  2. Grace,

    Wonderful job. Thank you for sharing this race day story. Many of us can identify with the setting and can see us in Grace. You nailed the humorous ending :)



    Happy Writing.


    Mrs. Trivedi-Ziemba
    Team 100 WC, USA

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