As the frosted moon strode over the charcoal sky, Emma's eyes grew in sync with its reflection. Swimming in the lit azure sea with only a ray of moonlight to guide her, was one of the pleasures of her life. Suddenly, she grew close to an underwater grotto she had never seen before. She paused in front of it, taking a moment to admire it. She could see something sparkling, like iridescent scales on a tail. Running out of breath, she made a split-second decision to swim in. 'So, what lies ahead of me?' she thought to herself...
Well done David! Really vivid description and brilliant use of adjectives. You've painted a really clear picture of a beautiful scene - I really like your use of the words iridescent and azure. You've great vocabulary and are using your talent for writing well.
ReplyDeleteKeep it up!
Ms Kealy
St Rose's NS
Dublin, Ireland